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Why? Once again, we can see how different items in a sentence must be pre-
sented as parallels – i.e. with the same structure. With paired words we often see
“and,” “either,” “rather,” etc. used to join words or phrases. Make sure that these are
the same; for example, in the first instance
we needed two adjectives, and in the
second we needed the verb tenses to be the same.
Why Use Parallelism in the IELTS?
The IELTS writing exam is a fantastic test of English proficiency. There is no way
to cheat or trick the system. You simply have to demonstrate your English level
by writing an honest piece of work. The examiner will mark you on the following
criteria:
task
achievement
coherence and cohesion
lexical resource
grammatical range and accuracy
The last point on the list is “grammatical range and accuracy.” This means hav-
ing a variety of sentence structures (simple,
compound, complex, compound-
complex) and a mastery of verb tenses. Parallelism is something that most
students don’t fully understand, yet it is not difficult to learn. I teach this to my
students in one 90
minutes class, and by the end of the lesson, they understand
it so well they are sick of my examples!
Like learning how to use a comma or semi-colon, it is not difficult, yet it is
incredibly impressive. Your examiner will see your
writing and mark you higher
than other students on that basis.
Of course, like I said, there is no cheating the system – if all you know how to
do is make your writing parallel and punctuated, it doesn’t help. But it is a huge
boost to your armory of English language skills and will
be a pleasant surprise for
the examiner.
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An IELTS Example of Parallelism
Let’s look at an incorrect example from an IELTS Writing Task 1 essay:
As a general trend, the chart shows that while the unemployment rate
in the United States gradually decreased over the period shown, in
Japan there was a significant increase.
Why is this incorrect? Because in the first part we use the phrase “gradually
decreased” (an adverb + verb) and in the second we say “a significant increase”
(adjective + noun). We should rephrase it to give parallelism thusly:
As a general trend, the chart shows that while the unemployment rate
in the United States gradually decreased over the period shown, in
Japan it significantly increased.
Let’s correct the following faulty parallelism from:
According to the data from the graph, in March 1993, 7% of Ameri-
cans were unemployed, whereas the unemployment rate in Japan
was just 2.4%.
To:
According to the data from the graph, in March 1993, 7% of Americans
were unemployed, whereas just 2.5% of Japanese were unemployed.
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