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An IELTS Example of Parallelism
Let’s look at an incorrect example from an IELTS Writing Task 1 essay:
As a general trend, the chart shows that while the unemployment rate
in the United States gradually decreased over the period shown, in
Japan there was a significant increase.
Why is this incorrect? Because in the first part we use the phrase “gradually
decreased” (an adverb + verb) and in the second we say “a significant increase”
(adjective + noun). We should rephrase it to give parallelism thusly:
As a general trend, the chart shows that while the unemployment rate
in the United States gradually decreased over the period shown, in
Japan it significantly increased.
Let’s correct the following faulty parallelism from:
According to the data from the graph, in March 1993, 7% of Ameri-
cans were unemployed, whereas the unemployment rate in Japan
was just 2.4%.
To:
According to the data from the graph, in March 1993, 7% of Americans
were unemployed, whereas just 2.5% of Japanese were unemployed.
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