TASK SHEET 1: Here are two letters to a bank manager. Compare tem and say which one you prefer. One contains mistakes of style. Can you identify them?
Dear Mr. Johnson,
I have been working as a librarian for three years at the Central Records Office , but I do not feel that I wish to make this my career.
A friend recently told me about a course that the Oxford Business School offers, and it sounds most interesting. I am told that employers respect this college and its diploma. In order to follow this course I would need a loan of approximately £200. could I make an appointment with you to discuss the possibility of this? I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Alex Forrester
Dear Mr. Johnson,
As you probably know, I have done about three years as a librarian at the Central Records Office, just round the corner from your bank, in fact, but I do not really think it is the sort of job I can do much longer. Anyway, I was at this party the other day and I met a friend and he told me about a great Course you can do at the Oxford Business School and my brother thinks I would get a good job if I did it. Do you think I could come and see you, and talk about a bank loan? About £200 would be enough. I’m looking forward to your letter. I hope you will say yes. Yours sincerely, Alex Forrester